Monday, December 3, 2007

Seth's Compare/Contrast Essay from week 11

There are many differences and similarities between the Indus Valley and China during the Ancient times. Both of them were farmers, and they both lived next to a river. One of the main differences is their religions. The Indus Valley region believed in Hinduism, whereas China believed in Taoism and Confucianism. The next thing is government. The Indus Valley believed in the caste system, and China had an emperor. Last, was their writing. The Indus Valley used cuneiform, which was made up of lines and triangles. China used caligraphy which were small pictures that originally looked like the word. All in all there are more differences than similarities.


This is Seth's first attempt at a compare/contrast essay. I would say it is OK for a first draft, but the transitions are a bit stiff and artificial. I think we'll spend some time working on this before we make a final draft.

2 comments:

Unknown said...

This looks great for a 3rd grader! Can I ask what writing program you are using?

Denise in IN

Tina in WA said...

I think it looks good too. :o)

~Tina in WA